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dvenetian
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05/31/2007 11:54 pm
Originally Posted by: Jolly McJollysonThat's close to my thought process trying to end this piece. The lesson learned, presumably, would have been that the monomyth is an imposition rather than an inherent quality. However, Joe doesn't really learn anything, except that he's choosing between carrots and turnips and can't even handle such an insignificant decision. Making it into "the idea and the reality, the potency and the existence." I've decided to end it as it is. He doesn't fail or succeed, and he doesn't choose or not choose (remember, he's still sitting in front of the vegetables, he could very well still grab one of the two).

Let's not be so hasty here. An ending could reflect from his inability to make a simple decision by his own power. Example; Darkened by what he thought was his own shadow, he glimpsed up through one eye only to find his banshee standing above him. "I changed my mind" she expressed, "I'm making soup tonight instead". She turned toward the checkout and snarled "Get up off the floor, you whimpering idiot and grab some of those turnips"!!!! As he began moping behind her, she turned and handed him the cans of soup saying "Take these home and clean the bathroom","There's piss all over the floor"!!!!!!!!!!!! "And heavens to betsy, wash that Combgrease shampoo goo out of your hair"!!!!!!!!!!!!
"I'm gonna treat myself to a snowcone"..............."Good bye, Dear". She then wiped his eyes and kissed his forehead.....