Not bad. Some good playing. I think it could be better if there where some breaks. The guitars go non stop making it feel cluttered I guess. I think you need some stops to let people breath and add some emotion to it. It's blues.

You also might try doing a kind of dueling guitar licks with the left channel battling the right channel. Quick riff on the left and then a quick counter lick to the right. Back and forth and by the end they converge. Just some ideas to mess with. :cool: