A new song...

Very Chevelle inspired.... inspired by their Point #1 album...... I write very few HARD rock songs... and even fewer in drop D.... this might even be a first.

words in and out, off my tongue
collide into myself, for what?
light fades and swells, steals my eyes
and i'm not ready for this life
throw it up and down
what now?
i'll ask
no reply
and why?

a life lived to make it
doesn't cut it
i've got to break it
i will create it
the way i like it
my own life of vision
i'll do it adam's way
day break.
moon fade.
in a day
adam's way.

breathe in and out, stings the lung
painting my picture, of what?
black mixed with white, paint my sky
and i have no tears to cry
falling up and down
i ask why?
and no reply
but why?

dreams that i can't paint
with colors i can't make
with black and white
it all turns out grey
but anyway
but anyway

a life lived to make it
doesn't cut it
i've got to break it
i will create it
the way i like it
my own life of vision
i'll do it adam's way
day break.
moon fade.
in a day
adam's way.

I'm likin that dude :)

I can't stop.... I've been in nonstop writer mode the past 3 days... A John Mayer'ish song I started last night...I figured I'd post it here rather than fill up the threads with my lousy songs.

I moved into a new place today
I was suppose to do it yesterday
The white walls scream for color
In the front yard, a four leaf clover***
I've got boxes up to my knees
and I've only got one set of keys
Well it's my first Monday
So far from my Friday
and you
It's my first Monday
starting brand new
and everything feels right this time
If I can remember where I packed my mind.
My new Monday
So far from Friday
and you
I moved into a new place today
I was suppose to do it yesterday
The carpet's clean for the time.
and the kitchen smells like pine.
I can't find most things, Where's my phone
Right now my house is anything but a home.
Cuz it's my first Monday
and it's so far from Friday
and you
It's my first Monday
I'm gonna start brand new
But it just doesn't feel right this time
I can't remember where I left my mind
On this Monday
So far from Friday
I'm thinking of you.
I moved into a new place today
I was suppose to do it yesterday



***haha... I had a line here that was "the bathroom's sans odor" but it really took away from the serious emotional value of the song... haha. i liked it though so i figured I'd share it.

That's pretty impressive dude, dunno what was on your mind, but it gives me a feeling of confusion and emptyness, which is good (even if my interpretation is wrong) caus it's conveying a feeling, which is exactly what a song should do.

Originally Posted by: aschlemanIn the front yard, a four leaf clover***

Before I read the thing at the bottom, I thought this line was "In the front yard, a four leaf cloverf*ck." :)

Both of those songs suck!







j/k


I like the second once better... that's probably because I'm not into the whole motivational theme song... they always seem cheesy to me. Don't worry about rhyming so much. Or you can. Nevermind I'm to indecisive to have an opinion right now. Good work.

Originally Posted by: strat-manThat's pretty impressive dude, dunno what was on your mind, but it gives me a feeling of confusion and emptyness, which is good (even if my interpretation is wrong) caus it's conveying a feeling, which is exactly what a song should do.

Yeah, kind of inspired by a situation of breaking up with someone that you live with and having to move out and get a new place... that sort of thing... Didn't really happen to me... in all actuality the idea came to me when I was thinking of the movie "Break Up"........... sad.... I know.

Thanks for the comments Holly... Yeah I know the first one is kind of a niche writing and I feel lame writing that stuff... But that came to me all in one big wave of creativity and I felt good enough about it to actually write it down... Normally those types of songs get shot down in my mind before they even reach a pad of paper... As for the rhyming... it helps me in the writing process to create flow and boundaries for my lines... gives the words a rhythm... When the songs get to the stage of actually being songs I will often change out words and sometimes whole lines fitting the rhythm but more clearly conveying my point without the restrictions of rhyming...

Like I said.... I can't stop... this is just a short thing I wrote in my blog the other day.... just off the top of my head... I guess I have to feed the creative monster while it's here to eat... It's short... but I just added some chords over it and it sounds like it'd be a cool acousticy thing. I'll just have to see if I can add onto it. It's more of a poem...

even the sun shines down
and i find beauty in a rain cloud.
when the storm's movin in.
this heat that rain can cool.
i find beauty in playing the fool.
and the storm's movin in.
thunder is the magic word
better seek shelter little bird
the storm's movin in
in on me.
a storm i want to meet.

Originally Posted by: aschleman
even the sun shines down
and i find beauty in a rain cloud.
when the storm's movin in.
this heat that rain can cool.
i find beauty in playing the fool.
and the storm's movin in.
thunder is the magic word
better seek shelter little bird
the storm's movin in
in on me.
a storm i want to meet.

I like it, it didn't have to tell me
What time is it, is it over yet
I liked it, you didn't convince me
What did you say, is it over yet
Did the clouds fly over
Or are they here for awhile
These rain clouds, I don't mind
Because I like it, it didn't have to tell me
What time is it, is it over yet
Is it over yet.

Thunder translates voices from above
Tonight these rain clouds hang a little low
Enough to take my head
But leave my body alone.
Why you have to go and take it
Why you have to leave me here
Why you have to go and break it
Split the trees of all my years...
Lightning isn't friends with the thunder...
That's why you rarely see one with the other
Unless it's your lucky day
And they're both coming to take you away

:rolleyes: