Originally Posted by: alucard0941alrite cool Ill check them out.

Anyway, what did you think? :confused: I wrote this poem for my English class , so its kinda amature...

Yeah, I'm with Eggman. A lot of mixed metaphors here. Also, it's best to read more poetry and really get a fixed idea on rhythm and cadence. Some of your phrasing is a bit bulky and laden with too many hard or too many soft syllables. The title's a little pretentious, I'd try to avoid that kind of oxymoron in a title, at least one so blatantly phrased. Honestly my advice is to read more poetry and try to get a handle on what the pros do.