Some more lyrics... sort of.


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10/15/2004 4:25 am
Well, this hit me at work today, and I haven't had time to post them up and get some feedback until now! :eek:

It's not really lyrics, but more like words in a lyrical-type format (wow, I used more words but somehow managed to attain less meaning!). I'll use this in a song someday, but I'd have to tighten it up a bit, try to get some more rhyming bits, maybe, who knows.

[U]Random song - (C) 2004 by me[/U]

I thought that we were through
But now you're resurfacing
Like an injured submarine
Or is it a drowning swimmer?

And I don't know whether
to feel pity or horror
Or should I feel sorrow
Over the love we have lost
That we carelessly tossed... aside

So if you're drowning
I'll shed a tear
But if you're just floating
Then I'll wait and watch as you drift off
Into the endless sea

And I'll shove off, too
On this pyre for you and me

I'm swimming the same ocean
I'm treading the same black water
The sun hasn't gone down just for you
And I feel those waves breaking on my back, too

What we want is peace
In all senses of the word
May we also find relief
May we keep what has been shared



OK, release the hounds!!!
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10/15/2004 7:45 pm
I really like it. Reminds me of how I was after me and one of my ex's broke up.
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11/02/2004 5:26 pm
OK Jolly, I responded to almost all your lyrics postings. Your turn. And anyone else.
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11/02/2004 6:32 pm
It's a great skeleton! It just needs some further editing, perhaps a second and third go through. Polishing it up should make it a really solid song!
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11/02/2004 6:59 pm
Yeah, actually, now that it's been a couple of weeks and I've had a vacation, it's a bit weird coming back to it. It's hard to put myself back into the frame of mind I had then. I can see some things I would have said differently right off the bat, so I think it'll change in the next couple edits.

That being said, I'm a real slacker for editing, so it might just stay the way it is unless something really bothers me about it.
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